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Some people are fond of buying new gadgets, phones, or laptops. Is this a good or bad thing? Discuss your opinion

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Many people hold the opinion of buying new gadgets, phones or laptops whenever there is a new release from the manufacturers while some other people see
this
 as a bad idea and continue to use the old
one
 that they are using at present. In
this
 essay, I will explain both views and discuss my opinion hereafter. On the
one
 hand, purchasing of new gadgets, phones or laptops is a good idea. It let us have access to sophisticated and easy to use electronics.
Furthermore
, most of the new gadgets usually come with a new update and new
application making
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application, making
 communication easier and make life more comfortable.
On the other hand
, there are a lot of disadvantages to purchasing new gadgets, phones or laptops. These ranges from wasting of money, isolation from and friends, health-related issues and
lot
Suggestion
a lot
 more. The money for buying new electronics can be well spent on some other important things.
For instance
, the money can be used for
charity
Suggestion
charitable
purpose
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purpose, such
such
 as a donation to the needy people or construction of
religious house
Suggestion
religious houses
a religious house
. Purchasing of new electronics can hurt someone’s health
such
 as the ray of light of the electronics directly into the owner’s eye, body pain and sometimes lack of sleep.
This
 occurs because the mind and soul that are directly attached to the new gadgets making the owner’s attention to be shifted away from other important things. In conclusion, buying new gadgets, phones or laptops
is
Suggestion
are
 a good thing only if someone doesn’t have access to the old gadget or someone don’t have
one
 before. Remember that, there
are
Suggestion
is
 a lot of people who need
one
 thing or the other in the world, spend wisely on them
instead
 of purchasing new electronics when you have
one
 before.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology advancements
  • convenience
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • status symbol
  • financial burden
  • obsession
  • impulsive
  • consumerism
  • sustainability
  • e-waste
  • environmentally friendly
  • second-hand market
  • repairability
  • upgradability
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