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Smacking children is the best form of discipline.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#children #form #discipline
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Corporal
punishment
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 has become increasingly popular among parents and teachers.These people claim that physical
punishment
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 can deter from anti-social
behaviour
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.
This
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 essay will argue that smacking and corporal
punishment
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are
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is
completly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
 preposterous to
install
impart gradually
instill
discipline
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 among children. On the one hand
,
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,
I believe that corporal
punishment
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affects
property of a personal character that is portable but not used in business
effects
 to
childrens
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children's
children
 mental health which emerges fear among young teenagers.There
are
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is
 a range of options that take good care of children without using the power.
Firstly
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,
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,
parents should contact with their
childrens
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child's
children
children's
 teacher and need to talk to children about the internet and
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 dangers.
For instance
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,
well
(often used as a combining form) in a good or proper or satisfactory manner or to a high standard ('good' is a nonstandard dialectal variant for 'well')
Well
-educated and highly-motivated
parents educate to
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parents to educate
 their children and prepare their
children
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child's
children's
 future life.
Therefore
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,
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,
parents should give
encourgement
the expression of approval and support
encouragement
 and gentle than other
pyhsical
involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit
physical
punishment
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 to
upbringing their
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upbringing, their
 children in a true way.
On the other hand
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,
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,
parents ought to reinforce
childrens
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children's
children
discipline
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 by using the power which helps to preserve their children from
distruptive
characterized by unrest or disorder or insubordination
disruptive
destructive
behaviour
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,
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,
They are justifiably worried about
controling
able to control or determine policy
controlling
 their children as
distruptive
characterized by unrest or disorder or insubordination
disruptive
destructive
behaviour
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become
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becomes
 on violence that negative impact on
childrens
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children's
children
 bright future
,
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,
Therefore
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,
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,
many parents use the power
for
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of
 taking a control over their
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
children's
discipline
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.The recent study indicates that sixty percent of young teenagers in
USA
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the USA
 are addicted to
drug
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drugs
 and alcohol and can easily turn to crime due to lack of parental guidance.These few instances have bolstered existing fears in parents that corporal
punishment
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 should preserve anti-social
behaviour
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. To sum up
,
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,
this
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 essay argued that corporal
punishment
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 can deter children from
distruptive
characterized by unrest or disorder or insubordination
disruptive
destructive
behaviour
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,
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,
but it will have
detrimental impact
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a detrimental impact
 on
childrens
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children's
children
 mental health. While there are some
benifets
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
 of using smacking in the
children
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child
discipline
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.I
,
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,
however
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,
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,
believe that they should give
encourgement
the expression of approval and support
encouragement
 to grow up their children.

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