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Smacking children is the best form of discipline.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#children #form #discipline
Corporal
punishment
 has become increasingly popular among parents and teachers.These people claim that physical
punishment
 can deter from anti-social
behaviour
.
This
 essay will argue that smacking and corporal
punishment
are
Suggestion
is
completly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
 preposterous to
install
impart gradually
instill
discipline
 among children. On the one hand
,
Accept space
,
I believe that corporal
punishment
affects
property of a personal character that is portable but not used in business
effects
 to
childrens
Suggestion
children's
children
 mental health which emerges fear among young teenagers.There
are
Suggestion
is
 a range of options that take good care of children without using the power.
Firstly
,
Accept space
,
parents should contact with their
childrens
Suggestion
child's
children
children's
 teacher and need to talk to children about the internet and
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 dangers.
For instance
,
well
(often used as a combining form) in a good or proper or satisfactory manner or to a high standard ('good' is a nonstandard dialectal variant for 'well')
Well
-educated and highly-motivated
parents educate to
Suggestion
parents to educate
 their children and prepare their
children
Suggestion
child's
children's
 future life.
Therefore
,
Accept space
,
parents should give
encourgement
the expression of approval and support
encouragement
 and gentle than other
pyhsical
involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit
physical
punishment
 to
upbringing their
Accept comma addition
upbringing, their
 children in a true way.
On the other hand
,
Accept space
,
parents ought to reinforce
childrens
Suggestion
children's
children
discipline
 by using the power which helps to preserve their children from
distruptive
characterized by unrest or disorder or insubordination
disruptive
destructive
behaviour
,
Accept space
,
They are justifiably worried about
controling
able to control or determine policy
controlling
 their children as
distruptive
characterized by unrest or disorder or insubordination
disruptive
destructive
behaviour
become
Suggestion
becomes
 on violence that negative impact on
childrens
Suggestion
children's
children
 bright future
,
Accept space
,
Therefore
,
Accept space
,
many parents use the power
for
Suggestion
of
 taking a control over their
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
children's
discipline
.The recent study indicates that sixty percent of young teenagers in
USA
Suggestion
the USA
 are addicted to
drug
Suggestion
drugs
 and alcohol and can easily turn to crime due to lack of parental guidance.These few instances have bolstered existing fears in parents that corporal
punishment
 should preserve anti-social
behaviour
. To sum up
,
Accept space
,
this
 essay argued that corporal
punishment
 can deter children from
distruptive
characterized by unrest or disorder or insubordination
disruptive
destructive
behaviour
,
Accept space
,
but it will have
detrimental impact
Suggestion
a detrimental impact
 on
childrens
Suggestion
children's
children
 mental health. While there are some
benifets
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
 of using smacking in the
children
Suggestion
child
discipline
.I
,
Accept space
,
however
,
Accept space
,
believe that they should give
encourgement
the expression of approval and support
encouragement
 to grow up their children.

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