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Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions

#quality #life #cities
Since past many decades, the optimization of living
better
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the good
life
 has drawn many residents in the bigger towns.
However
,
in contrast
 to the past, having a good lifestyle is nothing but a mirage due to the constant declination of the standard of living especially in the metro cities.
This
 essay will suggest that the principal causes of these issues are the over-population and negligible social
life
 and submit efficient migration policies and improve connection with
oneselves
reflexive form of "us"
ourselves
 families and community as a viable solution. The main cause of lowering lifestyle's crisis, which is currently affecting
majority
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the majority
a majority
 of the
city
 population is the heavy influx of the people in the
city
 and the
government
 may fail to cater the required infrastructure facilities like schools, medical services and community places,
also
 with increasing people, the job opportunities are
dwindled
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dwindling
 and as a consequence they have to compromise with the
life
 they had dreamt of. In the recent study held by
Indian
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the Indian government
government
, almost 30% people who has shifted to cities in the past has failed to find jobs in their field and have to prefer cash jobs for their livelihood.
In addition
 to
this
, to earn
livelihood
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a livelihood
 in the competitive job market people can hardly spare any time for family and social
life
. The most practical solution to
this
 problem is that
government
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the government
governments
 should introduce intra- country migration policies. An effective policy could distribute the people in the
cities according
Accept comma addition
cities, according
 to the need of the
city
.
For example
, the Northern provinces in India
has
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have
 cities which
requires
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require
skillset
 of engineers for developing latest infrastructure,
hence
 the
government
 should lobby their engineer citizens who want to migrate in these cities.
Moreover
, the people should consider involving into more social activities and attend the get
togethers
in contact with each other or in proximity
together
 of their community living in their
city
,
this
 will not only help to develop the contacts but improve their social
life
. In summary, it is evident
for
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in
 the above discussed illustrations that there are various
vauses
give rise to; cause to happen or occur, not always intentionally
causes
 responsible for
deplination
a copy that corresponds to an original exactly
duplication
depletion
 of living standards in the big cities which are resolvable if appropriate actions and taken by the individuals and the
government
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overpopulation
  • Strained resources
  • Commute times
  • Economic stress
  • Community events
  • Affordable housing
  • Environmental regulations
  • Green spaces
  • Urban environments
  • Socialize
  • Foster
  • Tackle
  • Strategies
  • Implementing
  • Pollution
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