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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Write at least 250 words.

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Many people believe that phases of
life
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 are the one making it worth living for, as some feel their childhood was most memorable
time
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 of their lives. While others argue that being grown up has given them a sense of calmness regardless of the duties. I support the view that in spite the responsibilities,
adult
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 phase is the most enjoyable
time
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 in people's
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. Those who advocate adolescent year being the happiest may argue that they had an active body to perform any physical activity, and
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 may believe that during that
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 they had no work pressure or worries. For instances, many people are obese during their mid
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 is because of extensive work pressure and zero movement. Despite to the active body and no pressure, the teenage years are mostly full of insecurities, I have not seen any teen who is not conscious of their look. Puberty hitting during these years makes their
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 more messy.
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, most of the teenagers are in a hurry to become an
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.
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, feeling of grown up itself is satisfactory because one has ample amount of money or is in the path to achieve financial gains,
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, the confidence which is because of a complete education and experiences is priceless. During
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 we do have too much responsibility
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 as paying bills and food e
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expenses, however
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 it is all done with the sense of maturity and planning.
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, after being an
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 we hardly have to worry about our looks, by that
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 most people understand the concept of inner beauty. To conclude
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, even though adolescent years have more perks physically and mentally, the
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life
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 is more secure financially and spiritually.
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