Some suggest that young people should take a job for few years between school and university. Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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It is common nowadays that students work for a period of time
instead
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of going straight to
university
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. In my opinion, young people can gain new experience while I
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think that it could lead to some problems. On the
on
used of a single unit or thing; not two or more
one
hand, one of the advantages of getting into a job before
university
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is that you can learn new things which are imperative in the future.
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, working in a restaurant as a waiter requires capabilities
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as attentiveness, teamwork, and socialization. These skills are useful in the
university
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life where you have to make new friends and work together with them. Imagine going into your favourite
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university but
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university, but
end up being isolated from colleagues
instead
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. Another merit is that you can become independent. Working as a full-timer keeps you and your family apart. To illustrate
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, one of my friends used to be homesick while working as a supermarket clerk.
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, he is now accustomed to his college rather than being away from his parents and siblings.
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, getting a job before applying
university
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gives you plenty time to pay some
universities
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university
universities'
fees.
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, you are not likely to pay off any debt.
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,
however
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, there are some disadvantages to
this
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which you may not
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
the major you want to
take because
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take, because
the
university
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you are applying may drop the subject.
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, competition between other people may
rise
come into existence; take on form or shape
arise
.
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, even if you are eligible to
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
, you could not be accepted by the
university
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because of
more intellectual
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most intellectual
students. Overall, I think there are pros and cons working in between school and college.
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, it is inevitable that obtaining new knowledge and personality are vital for you.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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