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Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people find learning about the past a waste of time, because we are now in a new
era but
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era, but
 to me, we have many things to learn about the past and ways to take profit of what happened to our ancestors. The things that our ancestors have lived were important because it made them take decisions according to the challenges they had to face, those decisions have
also
determine
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determined
 the future and how things were going to develop and the consequences are things that we currently are used to do, have, or avoid.
For example
, if many inventions had not been created in the
past we
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past, we
 would not
been
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be
 using them today and we would not know how to use them or develop them. The past creation
have helped
Suggestion
has helped
 us to understand and learn how to give a different use to the things that surround us. "Knowledge is power" it is said that people who owns the knowledge of something is
powerfull
having great power or force or potency or effect
powerful
 in that area or field. People who came before us took a lot of mistaken decisions and
also
 many others that were great, due to that we are suffering or enjoying the consequences.
knowing
Suggestion
Knowing
 what happened in the past can help us to prevent those situations from
reppeating
the act of doing or performing again
repeating
 again
or
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or, on
on the
contrary they
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contrary, they
 can be an example of how we should manage things and even improve the result. In my viewpoint the past is what
create
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creates
 the future and knowing abut it was the thing that gave us the
possiblity
a future prospect or potential
possibility
 of improvement, it is
also
 what makes people have an identity and feel
ownwership
the relation of an owner to the thing possessed; possession with the right to transfer possession to others
ownership
 over your personal life and history because when you have no information
were
In or at or to what place
where
 you come from you often feel lost and wandering.
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