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Writing Samples
Band 7.5

Write a letter to a bookstore manager who is living in another city. Ask him/ her to make available a book that you are interested in. In you letter. - What book you are looking for? - Why you need this book. - How you plan to purchase the book

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Dear Sam, I am writing
this
 letter regarding an important
book
, I need
this
book
 as soon as possible. The
book
's name is HTML Coding and the
book
's author is John Smith. I prefer e-books despite hard copies with the latest version. I request you, to send me
this
book
 by the end of
this
 month. I need
this
 HTML Coding
book
 as it not only helps me enhance my technical knowledge but, will
also
 be effective in building my website, which I can publish on the Google platform.
This
 website will be very constructive for me to post all my tips regarding cooking, self-care, and, healthcare and that's how I can follow my passion for cooking and self-care.
Moreover
, HTML is the basic language behind every technical language, I will surely keep
this
book
 for my future references.
lastly
, I am planning to purchase
this
book
 online, you will receive the money in your bank account and I will receive
this
book
 via email from your end. I want to mention here, that do not create several copies of the e-
book
 as it can crash the original version try to save one copy on the phone, so, we can keep the backup. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully XYZ
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coherence cohesion
Remember to capitalize the first letter of sentences, proper nouns, and ensure uniform formatting throughout, such as beginning paragraphs with a capital letter.
suitable writing tone
Ensure your letter maintains a polite and professional tone but avoid redundancy, for example, instead of 'the book’s name is,' you could directly write, 'I am looking for the book titled HTML Coding by John Smith.'
task achievement
The letter clearly states the book being requested, the purpose for needing the book, and the method of purchase.
coherence cohesion
There is a good use of transitions and linking words, making the letter easy to follow.
greeting and closing
The closing statement is polite and professional, enhancing the overall tone.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • edition
  • publication year
  • out of stock
  • academic purposes
  • personal interest
  • work-related reasons
  • unavailable
  • shipping costs
  • reserve
  • in-person pick-up
  • online payment
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