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International travel is becoming cheaper and more countries are opening their doors to increase the number of tourists. Do the advantages of increased tourism outweigh the disadvantages.

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It is thought that a visit to other countries by tourists has become cheaper compared to some recent years while the number of visitors increases,
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 recession are taking advantage of the opportunities
such
 as generation of revenue and in most cases use the avenue to attract foreign investors to their states. Admittedly, the benefits of increasing total tourists to a
country
 while reducing the amount paid for a visa or in any case flight tickets will contribute significantly to the income of the
country
 while
also
 attracting investments as well as various technical expertise into the province.
For instance
, a nation like Dubai with a visa fee less than $100 has generated lots of revenue to tourism and tax from foreign nationals who have migrated to work in the
country
 as well as
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 able to invite various direct interventions into the economy.
On the other hand
, increasing the number of immigrant can cause a security breach
such
 as suicide bombing and other terrorist activities which will affect the image of the
country
 but
nevertheless
 investments
such
 as hospitals, schools and manufacturing companies will contribute immensely to the development and growth of the economy. Despite a recent attack on the Saudi Arabia oil facility, the
country
 while recuperating on the loss still accept visitors into the
country
. In conclusion, the merits of increased number of tourism to a nation will in no doubt contribute to the progress of the economy through
more revenue generation
Suggestion
the more revenue generation
, organizational structures and facilities needed for the operation of a society
adavancement
encouragement of the progress or growth or acceptance of something
advancement
 and transfer of knowledge which in many ways outweighs the disadvantage and
reasons
Suggestion
the reasons
 why more countries are inviting people to come do a tour in their countries.

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