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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Write at least 250 words.

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According to
unlversities
the body of faculty and students at a university
universities
 should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every
subject
.
Therefore
,
this
 essay will show some reasons of
argument
 for and
argument
 against.
Firstly
, I will discuss about two reasons of
argument
 for
to begin
 with universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every
subject
 because it will be
balance
Suggestion
a balance
the balance
 of idea while studying. In general, there usually are different ideas between man and woman. These
lead
Suggestion
leads
 to, new ideas from different vision will happen. Another reason is it display that have equal of
society not
Accept comma addition
society, not
eccept
generally approved or compelling recognition
accepted
 in each side.
In addition
, nowadays, the most societies become to
accept ability
satisfactoriness by virtue of conforming to approved standards
acceptability
 of both in any way.
Secondly
, I will discuss about one reason of
argument
Suggestion
the argument
an argument
arguments
 against that s some subjects not suitable for each other.
For example
, some
subject
 of sports
such
 as weight
putting
(baseball) the batter's attempt to get on base
batting
. It is not suitable for female because there are
different
Suggestion
differences
 of body between male and female. In conclusion, I agree with universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every
subject
.
Moreover
, it
depen
Suggestion
depends
depend
depended
 on what the subjects that the students want to study, they can choose by
themselve
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
 because I believe that if the students like to study their subjects, they will do it well so that I strongly agree with
this
 topic.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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