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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#accessibility #university
Owing to
this
 statement, the wealthy and poor people have different pathways for entering into
university
. In my opinion, the people from
low background
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low backgrounds
 which
has lack of economic problem has
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is lack of economic problem having
has lack of economic problem has
 more difficult for studying in
university
 than rich peoples. On the one hand, the wealthy students with
poor mark
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a poor mark
poor marks
 in their examination will get
admission
 easily
in
Suggestion
into
 the
university
.
Nevertheless
, they will give capitation fee for the
admission
 or they can influence the
university
 management team by proper recommendation.
Moreover
, the rich people have more social status in the society, so the politicians or any other superior officers were interested in their admissions. So the economically sounded people have more reliable to get
admission
easily
Suggestion
eased
 and
also
 they can afford the huge fees of the
university
.
On the other hand
, the poor people can’t afford the capitation fee so the chance of getting
admission
 is lower compared to wealthy peoples. The management of the
university
 have more interested to give
admission
for
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to
 rich people because they got plenty of
money
 from each
admission
.
Therefore
, the students from poor family are
neglected due
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neglected, due
 to the lack of
money
. Even they got
admission
 without donation, they can’t afford the semester fees. In conclusion, I believe that the poor students are not easily accessible to
university
 than
wealthy
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wealthier
 students. The
money
 plays an important role for the accessibility into
university
. In our society, everybody
respect
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respects
 the people who have
money
 and give less value for honour, trust and truth.
Thus
 the achievements of poor students are not considered in the society.
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