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There have been major advances in technology over the recent decades and this has led to significant improvement in people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Human is pampering in lap of
technology
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. Presently, it is observed that mechanization is progressing by leaps and bounds
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, human life is becoming easy and comfortable
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 It
has been becoming
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has become
 a debatable topic whether advancement in
technology
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 is fruitful for our society or not
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Here, I would like to accord with
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 given statement. On the one hand
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 there are inevitable drawbacks of it according to other people's point of view.
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 and foremost, nowadays, people are becoming lethargic due to
over use
exploitation to the point of diminishing returns
overuse
 of gizmos. To justify
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the majority of people like to spend their
time
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 on electric devices
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 as on mobile phone
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computers rather than playing outdoor sports and spending quality
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 with family members.
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they are becoming victims of many ailments like as obesity
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skin problems soon.And
relationship
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the relationship
 has become vulnerable with each others
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On the other hand
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,
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 despite having a few limitations of
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 trend
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 it is contributing remarkably to amend the living standard of folks
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 with, increasing development in
technology
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 allows the people to save their precious
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For example
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, modes of transportation are proving a boon for everyone in
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 fastest era
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 People can easily travel the long distance in a flash, whereas in
past
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the past
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they had to waste
lot
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lots
 of
time
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 in the journey.
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, people can enjoy their trip without any hurdles. Apart from it, with the introduction of computer masses can complete their work
fastly
with rapid movements
quickly
 and without any mistakes. In big organisations, employees can complete their tasks efficiently and in apple pie order
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Consequently
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, we can say that thriving in
technology
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 is superior
for
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in
 improving the life of people. In conclusion,
although
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 there are some drawbacks of
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 trend
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 as it creates a laziness among the people
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 these can be neglected by considering the positive points of
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 approach. I would personally believe that advancement in
technology
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 is conducive
for
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to
 enhancing the life quality of individuals.
Submitted by gurichahal585 on

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  • technological advancements
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