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The table below shows the results of a survey to find out what members of a city sports club about the club’s activities, facilities and opening hours.

The table below shows the results of a survey to find out what members of a city sports club about the club’s activities, facilities and opening hours.
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 table compares the opinion of
males
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 and
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females
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female
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club
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 members of a city sports
club
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 about the services in four categories
such
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 as
activities
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, facilities and opening
hours
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.
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, a significant toll of
females
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 portions are very satisfied with opening
hours
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, and a few
proportion
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 of
males
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 are not satisfied with the
club
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's
activities
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. Now, turning to the details, nearly as many men as women are very satisfied with
club
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 facilities,
accounted
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 for 63% and 64%, respectively,
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 22% and 27% of
females
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 and
males
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 are satisfied, but only 14% and 10% are not satisfied. As can be seen in the table, more
males
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 than
females
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 think that
club
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activities
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 are very
satisfied
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,
while
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 only 35% of
females
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 are satisfied with
this
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 facility. We can see that most of the people are very satisfied with all services
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on averagely
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averagely
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, but 37% and 30% of both genders complain they are not satisfied with opening
hours
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 and
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club’s
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the club’s
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activities
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.
Although
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, only a tiny percentage of
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females
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female
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 members are not satisfied with opening
hours
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 and 37% of
males
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 are not satisfied, 72% of
females
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 and 44% of
males
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 are very satisfied with
this
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 service.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females, club, activities, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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