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In many countries good schools and medical facilities only available in cities. Some people believe that new teachers and doctors should work in rural area for few years, but some think everyone should be free to choose where they work, discuss both and give opinion.

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There is no doubt that primary facilities like educational institutes and hospitals are necessary.
Although
, some people believe that newly graduates should have no restriction to choose their workplace, I would argue that with own willingness they should give service for a few years in rural areas. On one hand, those who advocate to have the liberty of choosing own place of endeavour may argue that new teachers and doctors cannot be enforced to take a job in any uncomfortable environment.
This
 is because newly graduates require agreeable workspace to gain knowledge and confidence in their profession.
For example
, working in an uncomfortable atmosphere without comply could be dangerous and might create more harm than good.
In contrast
, if they make themselves comfortable in a countryside work area, it would give them the sense of giving back to society and happiness by aiding others.
On the other hand
, my view is that helping underprivileged people is a paramount element of humanity. In villages, primary facilities like education and medical is highly affordable and by creating the willingness to work there, teachers and doctors can get the experience they require as well.
Moreover
, the government should start an initiation project to create enthusiasm in new doctors and professors.
For instance
, providing adequate housing facilities and giving them better remuneration can attract those professionals who are willing to work in rural areas. If,
such
 steps are not taken into consideration, it will keep having inequality and injustice for primary necessities.
However
, without
such
 steps it could lead the country for unstable society and economic instability. In conclusion, despite the free will for working anywhere new teachers and doctors please, it is my firm belief that helping deprived people is an act of humanity and administration should spread cognizance for betterment of society and the region.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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