The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart shows the
number
of social networking
sites
visited by the people of Canada in the year 2014 and 2015.
Overall
, Canadians preferred to access one
site
at a time (36% in 2014 and 28% in 2015) when using
computer
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the computer
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. Surprisingly, there are still a great
number
of people who don’t visit social media
sites
with 22% in 2014 and a decrease of 1% in the following year. Focusing
to
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the
number
of users in relation to
number
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a number
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of
sites
opened, an obvious decline in figures can be observed for both years. 2014 have the highest percentage but was limited to one
site
only. The same
behavior
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was
being
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displayed by users in 2015 with 28
percent
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per cent
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. Interestingly, if we compare the drop in the percentage of users versus
to
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the
number
of
sites
being open at a time, 2014
have
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wider
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a wider
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gap than 2015. From 36%(1site) to 23% (2sites) to 12%(3sites) to 5%(4sites) to 2% (5sites).
While
the following year
its
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from 28%, 24%, 16%, 8%, to 4% respectively. In conclusion,
while
majority
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the majority
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of the Canadians use one
site
at a time, there is an insignificant
number
of them who are starting to explore simultaneously other
sites
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, sites, site with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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