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Some believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time . This can benefit teenagers and the community as well . Do you agree or disagree.

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Some people believe that teenagers should be asked to do
community
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work
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 in their leisure time because of their benefits and the
community
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 benefits. In my point of view, I partly agree with the opinion that the youth should take part in some
community
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work
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. On the one hand, joining unpaid
community
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work
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 provides to teenagers many useful experiences. They need to do some physical jobs
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 as cleaning the dirty roads, helping poor people in public areas that they did not do before.
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, they do not only realize the purpose of their lives and how lucky they are, but the youth
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 develop some necessary soft skills
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 as teamwork, communication.
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, if young people join a campaign that provide foods for homeless people at midnight, they could have chances to see that how lucky they are when they have their own house or still have their families, which makes them appreciate everything that they have already had. On the other side, doing unpaid social
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 depends on their choices;
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, requiring the teenagers for doing it is not necessary.
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, they have a range of works that they want to do in their leisure time.
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, in their free time, they tend to do some hobbies or follow their passion
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 as drawing, painting or singing that could help them develop their own skills and unwind stress
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 of doing the
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work
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. To sum up, doing the unpaid social
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 will benefit for teenagers and the
community
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 in various ways.
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, parents should encourage them to take part in and let them choose what they want to do rather than requiring them to do it.
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