The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart depicts how many
trips
made
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were made
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by
children
of
age
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the age
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band between 5 and 12 for the years 1990 and 2010 using various ways of
transport
to travel to and from school in a country. At the beginning of the period,
the
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car pooling
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carpooling
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was the least preferred
mode
of
transport
compared to
the
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walking which is the most significant among
children
.
In contrast
, car passenger was the most used choice among them
at the end
of the period.
In addition
, the
mode
of cycling was the least used in the same
year
that is
2010.
Initially
, the walking
mode
was very popular in the
year
1990 but it drastically decreased to 6
trips
that
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which
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is
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are
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the
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half of 1990's
trips
. The
mode
of both walking and buses was almost 6 for initial but reduced the 3
trips
per
year
.
Secondly
, In 1990,
children
used cycling and bus as
type
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a type
the type
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of
transport
with nearly 7
trips
per
year
, but it steadily reduced to almost 2
trips
in 2010 as compared to the previous
year
.
Besides
, In 1990,
children
used cycling and bus as
type
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a type
the type
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of
transport
with nearly 7
trips
per
year
, but it steadily reduced to almost 2
trips
in 2010 as compared to the previous
year
.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words trips, children, transport, mode, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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