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Band 7.5

Your landlord has increased the amount of rent you pay every month and you don’t find it appropriate. Write a letter to the landlord and in your letter, Explain why you are writing Describe why you find the increase inappropriate What you want to do now--

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Dear Sir , I am Rahul tenant of your flat no 802 , Prem Nagar. I am writing
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 letter to inform you that the monthly
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 you increased is inappropriate.
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 with , I got shifted to your flat eleven months ago and it is clearly mentioned in the agreement after the completion of one year of my stay 5%
rent
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 will be increased. Now I have noticed that you have increased the 15%
rent
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 per month.
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 , I have done a market survey and came to know that
rent
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 is not beyond INR 20000/- Per month for 1 Bhk.
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, I am the only earning person in my family so it is not possible for me to afford a 15% hike in
rent
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.
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, I really want to reside in your flat because it is very near to my office. I request you to please have a look into
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 matter and let me know whether it happened by mistake or else you want to increase the 15%
rent
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 per month. Waiting for a positive reply . Regards Rahul

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Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to use a variety of sentence structures to showcase your language skills and to avoid repetitiveness. Additionally, proper paragraphing increases clarity and coherence. Aim to have a clear introductory paragraph, several body paragraphs each focusing on one point, and a concluding paragraph.
Task Achievement
It's vital to precisely follow the prompt. Ensure your letter contains all three elements: the reason for writing, a description of the issue, and the steps you hope to take. You managed to include these but remember to develop all parts equally.
Coherence and Cohesion
Begin with 'Dear [Landlord's Name]' if you know it, and end with 'Yours sincerely,' if you used their name, or 'Yours faithfully,' if you didn't. More formal and varied sign-offs also showcase a higher mastery of language.
Task Achievement
Aim to maintain a polite and formal tone throughout the letter. Consistency in tone is important in formal writing and contributes to the task response grade.
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