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You are due to move into a rented apartment next week but you will not be able to due to an unexpected problem. Write a letter to the property manager. In your letter Explain the situation Describe your problems Tell him/her when you think you can move in

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Dear Mrs. Williams I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that, I can't move out next
week
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 in my
apartment
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 for some particular reasons.
First,
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the new
apartment
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 that I'm supposed to be
move
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moving
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in
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into
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, is still not ready for the specific date that I want to move
in to
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into
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.
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, I need to wait 1 more
week
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 before I can
finally
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 step into it. Since your
apartment
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 is near to my work, I'm kindly asking if you can still give me one more
week
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 to stay here and to have more time
packing
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to pack
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 my
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
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.
Therefore
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, living here in your studio for 5 years
,
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 really became part of my life
where
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and
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 I created a lot of memories for my own self-growth. I'd love
this
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 place where everything is
convinient
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convenient
 and
neighbours
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the neighbours
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 are all friendly. The new
apartment
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 will be available
at
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in
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 the first
week
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 of August, where exactly after one
week
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 of my due date here in your
aparment
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apartment
.
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, I'm kindly asking for your
understand
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 and consideration for
this
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 matter. Sincerely: Beth
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task achievement
Try to ensure that all sentences contribute directly to the task achievement for a stronger response.
coherence cohesion
Use transition words effectively to enhance the flow between different parts of the letter.
task achievement
Your letter has a clear purpose, and you addressed the prompt effectively.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are appropriately polite, fitting for the context.
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