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Band 7.5

You recently broke your leg and your colleagues from work sent you get well cards and presents. Write a letter to them and say •Thanks them for supporting you. •Describe how you spend your time. •Explain about your recovery process.

#leg #colleagues #work #cards #•thanks #•describe #time #•explain #recovery #process
Dear Teammates, I am writing
this
 letter to thank you for sending me get-well cards and presents. These gesture of love means a lot to me. I want to thank all of you that you are here during my leg injury to support me.
This
 difficult time becoming easy because of your good wishes. I spend my time watching the news
as well as
 I check my emails on a daily basis and I am trying to complete my all pending tasks.
Moreover
, I spend my time with my family as much as possible because I am not able to walk outside.
Thus
, I am doing all of these activities to not feel bored. My orthopaedic doctor told me that at least for one month I am not allowed to drive my car.
Additionally
, he
also
 suggested I walk in my house with the support of a walker and I do my exercise for a speedy recovery. Hope you all are doing well in the office. I miss all of you very badly. Yours Lovingly, Ziva Shah.
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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence, try to use transition words and phrases to connect your ideas more fluidly.
coherence cohesion
Consider grouping similar ideas into single paragraphs to make the structure more organized.
task achievement
Make sure to expand on how the presents and cards positively impacted your emotional well-being to fully achieve the task.
task achievement
The letter is polite and appropriately thanks the colleagues, which is well-suited to the task.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is warm and friendly, fitting for a letter to colleagues.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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