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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is an on-going debate that children should be introduced to studying a foreign language at an early
age
 rather than when they get to secondary school. In my opinion, I believe that the merits of learning
foreign language
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a foreign language
 at
early
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an early age, such
an early age such
age
such
 as exposure to other cultures and outstanding academic performance outweighs the demerits that may come with it. Admittedly, it has been argued by some people that introduction of different dialect at tender
age
 may be burdensome for children and they may
also
 confuse foreign languages with their native tongue.
Hence
, it is better to allow them to grow older before introducing them to different languages.
Additionally
, some people believed that it takes longer time and it is more costly to learn new languages as teenagers in secondary than when in primary schools.
Nevertheless
, I am of the opinion that it is easier for children to learn new languages at
tender
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the tender age
a tender age
age
 than when they are much older.
In addition
,
introduction
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the introduction
 of foreign language has been attributed to outstanding academic performance in children. It should be noted that recent research carried out by WHO have shown that
children cognitive
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children with cognitive
 capacity is higher
at
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in
 younger
age
hence
 their ability to quickly master new languages.
For instance
, when my sister travelled to France some years back, it was easier for their two children to quickly adapt and communicate in French than the parents. Conclusively, despite the numerous merits of learning foreign languages in primary school, I am of the opinion that the demerits in terms o
f be
the state or fact of existing
being
en burdensome and time consumption is less when compared with the merits
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