Multicultural societies, where people of different ethnic groups live together can bring more benefits than drawbacks to a society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Although

, there is no doubt that diverse ethnic colonies are emerging and it is important to determine the effects on the formation of society. I believe, it is beneficial because of the possibilities for becoming multilingual for future growth and to broaden the horizons.

First

of all, the positive trait of living in a multi-cultured society is opportunities for learning more languages.

This

is because interactions with multilingual people can help you to learn

further

languages and acquaintance of various dialects can aid to gain international business or work prospects.

For example

, fluency of language like French and Spanish can open various doors for job opportunities in Europe. If,

instead

, people will stay concerned on one tongue, lack of knowledge could attract very less trade windows with other regions and

this

could result into narrow business expansion and lower confidence of trading.

Furthermore

, multicultural neighbourhood can enrich comprehension of diverse cultures. Due to

this

, a person can help himself to increase a broad spectrum of thinking capabilities with learning and understanding depth of several traditions.

For instance

, reading literatures or learning about certain other dialect can teach him history, arts, foods and traditional festivals as well.

In contrast

, staying unfamiliar with

such

exquisite knowledge can be a drawback and there would be no

such

pleasure of enjoying different festivals and multicultural cuisines. In conclusion, because of the chances for learning other tongues and to feel the traditions of vast cultures, I believe

such

positive influences from a multi-regional individuals can bring more prosperity in the community.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

256 words

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