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Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best way to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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When they finish school, students face the problem of whether to get a job or continue their education. While there are some benefits to get a
career
 after school, I would argue that it is better to go to university or college.
To
Suggestion
With
 option to start work straight after school is attractive for some reason. Many young people want to earn money as soon as possible. In
this
 case, they become independent about their budget, and they will be able to afford for their life, even start a family. In terms of their
career
, young people who decide to find a
career
, rather than continue their education, they will have more chance to gain real experience and learn practical skills, all of them lead to promotions and successful
career
.
On the other hand
, I strongly believe that it is better for students to continue their education.
Firstly
, academic qualifications are required in many professions.
For instance
, it is impossible to become a doctor, teacher and lawyer without qualification relate to a relevant degree from university or college.
Secondly
, the job market is becoming more and more competitive, there are hundreds of applicants for a position in a company.
Therefore
, it is difficult for young people if they lack academic qualification, leading to they will not able to compete and lost the job opportunity. Follow the reasons mentioned above, it seems to me that students are more likely to successful and confident in their careers if they continue their studies at university or college.
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