Wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Undoubtedly, money is imperative to spend life as we desire. It is often argued that happiness does not come along with richness.
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, I completely disagree with
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statement, and I will discuss in
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essay that why I posses
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opinion. There are countless things that can be purchased with money, which eventually leads to happiness.
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, basic necessities that are being fulfilled with cash, is food. It is essential for human survival.
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, in many parts of Africa, there are myriad people who suffer and starve to death because they cannot afford to feed themselves.
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, devices
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as smart phones that are useful not only for communication but to kill free time as well, and those devices make people happy by allowing them to play games which make them happy.
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devices can only be bought if a person is wealthy. Apart from buying goods, health is
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important to stay happy.
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in many countries, residents are provided with free medical insurance, it is not the case in most part of the world.
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, In Pakistan, people are not given free medical coverage and government hospitals, which are affordable but are not adequately equipped. They often find it difficult to get treatment from private hospitals because these are very expensive.
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people prefer to suffer than losing money on treatment. In conclusion, from my perspective, wealth is crucial to stay happy because it does not only make basic necessities and devices affordable, but
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make you healthier by getting treated by qualified doctors.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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