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Some people believe that governments must apply high taxes to provide good public services to everyone. Give your opinion

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A good
taxation
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system
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 is the key for a prosperous
nation
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. It is a general believe that by taking appropriate measures regarding
tax
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 collection, one can improve the overall condition of public services (hospitals, park
,
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,
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continuing in the same way
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 there should be threshold to how these taxes should be collected.
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, the government can improve roads, hospitals and public transport by
taxation
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system
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. Prosperous
nation
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 around the world tends to give their taxes on a regular basis. Countries like Canada and Australia have solid roads and public parks better equipped as these two countries are considered to be
high paying
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a high paying tax nation
tax
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nation
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.
Taxation
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system
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 will eventually improve the standards of living and even could reduce the unemployment rate.
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, there should be an upper limit or threshold
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of
 how much
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 an individual or company should pay.
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, the
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system
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 works
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 that the higher the salaries or income the higher the
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 applied
on
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to
 the individual or company. By implementing
high
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a high tax system
the high tax system
tax
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system
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, the individual could skip the taxes which will lead to poorer
society
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societal
 as can be seen in Zimbabwe and Kenya. There should be
regulatory authority
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a regulatory authority
 in each country to make certain rules regarding
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system
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.
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 essay discussed the benefits of
taxation
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system
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 while
excess
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an excess
 of taxes would lead to overall dissatisfaction among individuals and they could somehow not leave the
tax
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 net
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 the
taxation
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system
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 will
overall raise the
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raise the overall
 standards of the
nation
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 while excess of taxes could lead to dissatisfaction.
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