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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country.

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Nowadays, many
people
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 are living and working in a foreign country either willingly or unwillingly.
This
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expose
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 to different
cultures
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This
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also
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 outline the disadvantages, including difficulties in coping with languages and
culture
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 of living and working abroad
countries
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To begin
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 with, the main advantage is that they will earn more money than they are currently earning in their homeland. They are paid more in foreign
countries
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 for the same kind of job they are doing in foreign
countries
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 which will help them to uplift their living standard.
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, as they are living
in
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abroad they will surely have the chance to
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 in different
cultures
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 and traditions that are followed in the
countries
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 they
worked
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work in
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. It will make them more aware of the different
cultures
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 and traditions being followed in
outsides
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countries
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.
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, it can boost the country economically.
On the contrary
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, living and working in foreign
countries
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 have some of the major disadvantages like
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to cope
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in coping
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 with language and
cultures
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. Most of the
people
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 who go abroad as
a labour
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labourers
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 are quite uneducated. So, for these types of
people
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, it might be difficult to learn languages.
For instance
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, when the employer
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 their employee to their festivals
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it might be difficult for
people
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 who are reserved and
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unwilling to change.
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, they are far from their native country, family, and friends. So, they may suffer from homesickness and depression.
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,
although
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 living and working
in
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abroad have some of the disadvantages like language barrier and cultural barriers. These problems will surely
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 by the payment they get which will uplift
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their
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the
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their
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 living standard and their lifestyles.

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task response
Expand on the advantages and disadvantages with more specific examples.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • quality education
  • high standard of living
  • diverse cultures
  • strong healthcare system
  • career advancement
  • safe and stable environment
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