The bar chart illustrates the amount of money per week on fast foods including hamburgers, fish and chips, and pizza in Britain

The bar chart illustrates the amount of money per week on fast foods including hamburgers, fish and chips, and pizza in Britain
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The bar chart illustrates the amount of money per week spent on fast
foods
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food
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including
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,
fish
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and
chips
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and
pizza
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in Britain. The preferences are divided into three groups by
income
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: High, Average, Low From the bar graph, the expenditure on fast foods by the
high
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high-income
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income
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group
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and average
group
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are
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is
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the highest for
hamburgers
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and pizzas
while
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it is the lowest
of
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for
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low
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low-income
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income
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group
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. The high and
average
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average-income
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income
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group
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groups
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spent 42 and 33
dollars
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on
hamburgers
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respectively.
The
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Pizza
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pizza
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was the
second
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preference for
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the high
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high
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high-income
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income
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group
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while
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the
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apply
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fish
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and
chips
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were the
second
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choice
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choices
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for
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the average
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average
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average-income
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income
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group
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.
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, the majority amount of money, which is 18
dollars
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was spent on
fish
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and
chips
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and 14
dollars
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on
hamburgers
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and the least amount of money 8
dollars
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on
pizza
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. The graph illustrates the trends in
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consumption
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the consumption
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of fast foods from 1970-1990.
Overall
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, the
consumption
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of
fish
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and
chips
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decreased over the years
while
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the
consumption
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of
hamburger
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hamburgers
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increased drastically. The
consumption
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of
pizza
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increased constantly
by
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little
by little
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. The usage of
fish
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and
chips
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deceased
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decreased
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from 308
grams
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to 240
grams
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while
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hamburger
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hamburgers
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increased drastically from 90 to 540
grams
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. The usage of
pizza
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had a steady increase from 40 to 280
grams
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second, while".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hamburgers, fish, chips, pizza, income, group, dollars, consumption, grams with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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