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Task 2: Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions. Do you agree or disagree?

#libraries #waste #money #computer #technology #functions
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Many civilised societies today operate public libraries. Some people,
however
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, believe that it is costly to maintain them and that the money should be spent on electronic libraries which can go on to replace the traditional one.
This
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 essay will highlight the major advantage and pitfalls of computer technology.
First
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off
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
 all, e-library is superior in terms of resource and volume of information that can be assessed. With the aid of various computers including laptops and tablets, unlimited amount of books and journals can be assessed in a small space.
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, when connected to the Internet, users can reach
unlimited amount
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an unlimited amount
 of information.
This
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 makes it more efficient.
On the other hand
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, electronic gadgets are known to be very expensive to run and
also
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 to maintain. In order to keep running, parts have to be serviced by a technician to prevent sudden crashes.
Furthermore
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, the devices usually run on softwares which have to be kept up to date. They
also
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 need
contant
unvarying in nature
constant
 electricity to run. These factors make it less cost effective.
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, not every member of the public is computer literate. Using the devices
reqire
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requires
require
required
 some sort of training
before hand
being ahead of time or need
beforehand
.
For instance
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 a survey carried out by a local Nigerian company revealed that 60% of the population didn't own a PC and that 20% have never used one.
This
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 proves that a new system would cut off a huge section of users. To conclude, it is reasonable for libraries
to go
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go
 paperless, but I believe it would be more wasteful to completely replace what's currently available.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • repositories of books
  • promoting literacy
  • community engagement
  • equal access to information
  • digital divide
  • accessibility issues
  • personalized assistance
  • educational programs
  • cultural events
  • safe spaces
  • community meetings
  • tactile experience
  • preserving historical documents
  • important cultural repositories
  • fostering a sense of community
  • communal hubs
  • serene and focused environment
  • conducive to study and reflection
  • irreplaceable value
  • distracted environment
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