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Blood sports have become a hot topic for debate in recent years. As society develops it is increasingly seen as an uncivilized activity and caused to helpless animals that are killed. All blood sports should be banned. Discuss the main arguments for this statement & give your opinion

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From time immemorial, the reference of sports using animals had been a quite contentious issue.
However
, with today's emerging society, the dreadful sport has been seen as very harmful and cruel to the creatures used.
Thus
, some suggest that it should be banned.
This
 essay will discuss both sides before a reasonable conclusion is made.
To begin
 with, it had been a tradition since ages that people use animals for some kind of sports. To buttress, there are shreds of evidence about the existence of animals for games in historical documents. Competitions like lion fights, met
one
 in Roman culture are clear examples. The reason behind
this
 was painted on the adrenaline rush it gives the players.
In addition
, huge money is
also
 realized from
this
.
For example
, bets are placed and the owners of the winning animals take the money.
This
 can be seen as few of the reasons people engage in
such
 activity.
However
, the violent nature of
this
 is undoubtedly terrifying. Often times, the creatures used are either left dead or in deep excruciating pain. To cite a personal example. I once watched
one
 of the blood spots on television. The dogs were sent in turns to fight a duck, which had already run into the sea for safety. The dog that successfully kills the duck wins. Most of the dogs got drowned by the river, but
one
. Obviously,
one
 can see that these animals are merely exploited just for human pleasure. It is a good thing that due to the consequences of
such
 sports, some private and non governmental organisations are protesting against these and
thus
 it should be omitted from some cultures. To conclude, blood sports are
such
 an inhumane activity, which causes pain and death to the animals exploited. In my view, the dreadful game should be extirpated.
Therefore
, it should be a combined effort of the government and the people to make sure that
such
 sporting activity is effaced.
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