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These days many of us prefer to throw damaged things away, whereas in the past people used to repair damaged items and keep them for a long time. Explain why do you think this change has happened. What are the effects of this change in attitude?

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Nowadays, many people abandon things or products easily when they are broken.
However
, in the old days, everyone tried his best to fix things as he could. In the following paragraphs, there are reasons to examine
this
 issue in depth. The main reason for people don not try to repair damage things is that buying new products is cheaper than repairing the old ones. Take clothes,
for example
. Youth now is getting used to buy dresses, pants, and T-shirts at certain fast fashion stores,
such
 as Zara and Uniqlo. By
this
 way, each new
one
 costs less than five hundred NT dollars.
However
, sending an old damaged
one
 to fix is much more expensive than having a new
one
.
Therefore
, form
such
 example, it demonstrates that while the fees for repairing is more expensive than purchasing a modern
one
. People won't hesitate to abandon the ancient goods. Another reason for people to give up damaged goods easily is that technology is changing everyday.
For instance
, Apple company announces new version of iPhones every year.
Hence
, it does not make sense if you want to keep the ancient iPhones, since it might can't catch up trends.
Consequently
, it can be said that high tech has influenced people that how they treat their broken belongings. To conclude, there is not to say that all the old, damaged things are totally without merit. Teenagers used to learn that how to cherish not only goods but
also
 relationships from fixing them.
Nevertheless
, it's hard for the younger now to know about appreciate. In general, I think these are the influences that how the alters affect the society in attitude.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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