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In some countries, it is illegal to reject applicants due to their age. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Introduction
Nowadays, people do not like to sit at home after retirement as it gets too boring for them.
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, they are too habitual of staying busy. Many countries do not allow people to work after a certain
age
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, while, some specific industry does not accept applications if a candidate exceeds the criteria of maturity which the organisation has set up.
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, recently some countries have made it illegal to reject applicant's basis their tenure and in my perspective, it is a positive development.
Body paragraph 1
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, in an industry like operations, many organisations do not accept the resume, if the person is above 40, even if he is a deserving candidate. Due to
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, people feel de-motivated to even search for new opportunities and to think out of the box. According to recent studies by the aviation industry, most of the crew members are under the
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 of 38 and the colleagues who are already in the organisation after 38, they are being asked to do jobs on the ground which is really devastating for the employees.
Body paragraph 2
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, in many countries, people are not allowed to work after the
age
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 of 60.
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 has an immense impact on senior citizen because, they have been working for a long time. Even after retirement, if they apply for a job, their applications get rejected. Recent studies by famous psychologists reveals that the 55 percent of anxiety and depression patients are senior citizens because of their loneliness.
Conclusion
To conclude, I completely agree with the development of the policies in the country to not to reject the applicant's due to their
age
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 as it is just a number and we cannot gauge someone's capabilities by his seniority.

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