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Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

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It is true that junior citizens are encountering a lot of pressure from a different p
erspective
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perspective, such
such
 as academic, social and commercial, unlike the old days.
This
 essay will discuss the root cause of the aforementioned stresses and the possible remedies to mitigate the issues. There are different kinds of
stress
 that children are having these days. In terms of academic, the main reasons for having pressure are parents with high expectations of c
hildren future.
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the child's future
child's future
a child's future
children's future
 Due to l
abor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
market demands, the children with good academic performance are likely to have better job opportunities. According to a study by the National University of Japan, 70% of h
onor
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honour
students from Japan are offered by job opportunities f
rom
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for
fortune 500 companies with higher pay before they even completed the studies.
Therefore
, parents, these days are sending their kids to different kinds of classes in order to have better academic performance.
Besides
, due to the inconsiderate b
ehavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
of the click-bait media and paparazzi, children from the famous family background, with the high financial status and with special talent are
also
 suffering from social
stress
 and lost the carefree childhood at a very young age.
In addition
, because of the aggressive marketing campaigns, children these days become victims of the commercial
s
tress
a mercantile establishment for the retail sale of goods or services
stores
in both online and offline. In order to reverse those pressures on children, the following remedies should be applied. For academic and social
stress
, parents should provide a healthy and happy home for children with balanced study and leisure time. And anti-
stress
 activities
such
 as sport, music and other activities are required to add to the children's daily schedule. For commercial
stress
, the Government should implement the law for commercial advertisements with age restrictions. In conclusion, it is unfair to have any kind of
stress
 to the children at a young age.
Therefore
, it is crucial to put effort for the children to have a happy life by applying the above-mentioned remedies.

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