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Stores should sell local food products and not imported food products. Do you agree or disagree

#stores #food #products
In
modern era
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the modern era
,
food sector
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the food sector
 is considered as a rampant booming
industry which
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industry, which
 affect society's life in
multitude
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multitudinous
 ways.
Moreover
, it is often believed that
shopkeppers
a merchant who owns or manages a shop
shopkeepers
shoppers
 must sale
indigenious
originating where it is found
indigenous
 products rather than foreign eatable stuff.
However
,
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,
in my
perspective I
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perspective, I
vehemtly
in a vehement manner
vehemently
 disagree with above notion.
Therefore
,
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,
the upcoming paragraphs shall reflect light on
preference
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the preference
 of imported
food
 items with relevant examples. There are various advantages of foreign made
food
to begin
 with, an individual gets
vast variety
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a vast variety
 of options to choose from. In
theoy
a well-substantiated explanation of some aspect of the natural world; an organized system of accepted knowledge that applies in a variety of circumstances to explain a specific set of phenomena
theory
this
Thai
,
consumer
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the consumer
 has plenty of options to pick and compare with traditional based products with international standards. To exemplify, as per Times of India
survey which
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survey, which
 was conducted among
adults it
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adults, it
 was observed that other countries made products create an intangible competition in
market
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the market
 for
progession
the act or process of producing something
production
 and
betterment
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the betterment
 of local products and leaves a room for advancement in
home country
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the home country
.
Thus
, encouraging better market for consumers. Going forth
,
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,
internationally produced
food
 has different nutritional benefits.
This
 is because
,
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,
each and every
food
 has tremendously drastic health advantages which is relentlessly lost in home country
food
.
For instance
, kiwi which is found in New Zealand is often imported to other countries for its unique nutritional value which cannot be found in any other fruit.
Hence
, it opens
door
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the door
doors
 for eaters into a gateway of balanced diet and for other
minerals which
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minerals, which
 is not available in their home country. To conclude, undeniably the local eatables has own
advantages but
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advantages, but
 foreign made products encourages healthy market for better development of own
food
 sector and opens the economy for new nutrients which is lacking.

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