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Some people believe that parents should teach children how to be a good member of the society.others believe school is the place to learn this.diacuss both views and give your opinion

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It is believed by some people that youngsters ought to be mentored by their guardian in order to behave rightly in the community, others,
on the other hand
, opinion that it is the responsibility of the school.i
n
Suggestion
In
my view,
although
 schools have a s
hare
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shared
role t
o
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in
 p
lay
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Play
in fostering the spirit of
cooperation
 Some people consider that students should learn how to behave rightly in the school.
This
 is because teachers have the required skills in instilling the spirit of
cooperation
 in children. l
earning
Suggestion
Learning
to understand and share v
alues
Suggestion
value
system cannot be achieved alone at home. At present, a child, in Nigeria, begins school at about three years,
thus
, entering into a wider community, which comprises of teachers and peers from various backgrounds.
This
 is where all that were learnt or seen by the parents
,
Accept space
,
a
re brought
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bring
to l
imelight.
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the limelight
It is
then
 the duty of the teachers to filters all kinds of behaviours
,w
Accept space
,
hile educating them on the proper way of behaviour
Consequently
, children are made to understand their peers and foster the spirit of
cooperation
 among them. On the other side of the argument,
p
Accept space
,
arents are thought to instill manners on their wards. Being the
first
 agent of change, it is the sole responsibility of the parents to ensure that values, morals and integrity are passed down to their wards. Children learn by mimicking.
Hence
, guardians should lead by examples.
For instance
, I learnt how to respect my elders by simply watching my parents. c
aregiver
Suggestion
Caregiver
 spend one-one interaction with t
heirs
of them or themselves
their
young ones
,a
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,
nd should be responsible for bringing up the children in the acceptable way, deemed fit by the society in which they belong. In conclusion, even though learning centres h
as
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have
a shared role to play, in order to foster
cooperation
 in youngsters, I believe the onus is on parents to teach their wards to become an exceptional citizen of the nation. h
ave
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Have
m
ore role
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a more role
to play.
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