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Some people feel that the media has the strongest impact on people’s lives. Others feel that it is politicians who have the most control over the way people lives. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

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The idea that whether the politician or the media
is having
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are having
 an impact on
people
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peoples'
peoples
 lives
is remain
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has remained
remains
 a source of controversy.
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, while some believe that it is the media who has
greatly
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greater
great
 effect on
people
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peoples'
peoples
 lives, I agree with those who feel that the politician have
controlled
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control
 over their way. On the one hand, it
could be argue
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could be argued
 that
media
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the media
is having
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are having
powerful impact
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a powerful impact
 on human lives in certain respects. Those who support media say that mankind is aware of not only does any new product come
in
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on
into
 the market, but they
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 come to know where the offers are going on in the form of advertisement which are depicted on TV or on
internet
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the internet
 and in the newspapers.
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,
media
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the media
often makes
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often make
have often made
 it easy for
human
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humans
a human
the human
 to take scrupulously precaution through weather forecast, which means that people are able to recognize the likely scenario
such
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 as snow, rain,
draught
a shortage of rainfall
drought
 and floods.
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, they tend to plan schedule
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.
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, I believe that there are more arguments to suggest that politicians have profoundly control the human lives.
Nations economy
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The nation's economy
Nation's economy
 is driven by the politicians across the world. I would argue that through
yearly budget they
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the yearly budget, they
the yearly budget they
 fix the rate of petrol, oil, gas and electricity.
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, people have to cope with
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budgets no
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budgets, no
 matter how unpleasant it is.
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, governments allocate money from
countries citizen
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countries citizens
a countries citizen
 in the form of taxation in order to generate income which has been utilized for infrastructure facilities like on the increment of roads, hospitals, stations, and public places. If they use
this
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 money inappropriately, it will directly affect local citizen of the country by charging high taxation on different items. So in my
opinion it
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opinion, it
 is the politicians who have
influential effect
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an influential effect
 on
people
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peoples'
peoples
 lives. To sum up,
although
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 people are frequently cautious for the upcoming product in the market, evolving the money in
form
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the form
 of taxation for the development of infrastructure is utilized for public welfare.
Therefore
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, on balance, I believe that politicians have
strong impact
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a strong impact
 on human lives.

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