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Computers are being used more and more in education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion.

#computers #education
Technology in the present day world has revolutionized services and products in almost all facets of life and the
education
 sector is one of them. It is often argued that it is a positive development while other states that it has devastating consequences.
This
 essay agrees that an increase in technology is a positive aspect and is extremely beneficial to the students.
This
 essay will discuss both points of view. Computers have aided the school curriculum to a large extent. Teachers are not only one, who are enjoying the benefits of
it but
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it, but
 students are
also
 taking the advantage of it, as it is making their study easy and entertaining with the help of visual effects.
Therefore
, technology is referred as a worthwhile tool in
classroom
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the classroom
classrooms
. Accessing information beyond geographical borders with just one click is a prime example of computers serving their motive in
classroom
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a classroom
the classroom
.
However
, an argument is being put forward by some short-sighted people that face to face interactions
has came
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have come
 to an end and is bringing devastating consequences in the field of
education
. People often say that the mind of children
are
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is
 more vulnerable and impressionable, which puts them into a risk, if they are not in a contact with a human teacher.
Moreover
, computers
brings
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bring
 internet and internet brings scam. More exposure and time with computer can make children a prey of scammers that can deviate them from their study path which will
further
 lead them to acquire unethical modes. To recapitulate, negative consequences of computers in
field
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the field
 of
education
 has some credibility.
However
, without
computers making
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computers, making
 children learn is not an effective way. I opine computers plays an integral part in
education sector
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the education sector
 with adequate measures we can certainly minimize its drawbacks and optimize benefits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Interactive learning tools
  • 2. Multimedia presentations
  • 3. Online resources
  • 4. Distance learning
  • 5. Remote areas
  • 6. Digital literacy
  • 7. Problem-solving
  • 8. Critical thinking
  • 9. Technology-driven world
  • 10. Digital textbooks
  • 11. Administrative tasks
  • 12. Cost-effective
  • 13. Distraction
  • 14. Social media
  • 15. Over-reliance
  • 16. Traditional skills
  • 17. Handwriting
  • 18. Face-to-face communication
  • 19. Technical problems
  • 20. Digital divide
  • 21. Inequality
  • 22. Educational opportunities
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