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Some people think that the best way to solve global environment problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #environment #cost #fuel
The tremendous usage of
fuel
 is the major cause of global warming. How can we save our Mother Earth? While few believe hiking the prices of
fuel
 curbs the global
environment
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environmental
 issues, I disagree
to
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with
 the assertion that increasing the oil fares would make any impact. There are few compelling reasons why I think the spike in
fuel
 prices would make any change in global
environment
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environmental
 issues.
Firstly
, people are very much accustomed to the luxury life that they choose comfort and refrain from usage of any public
transport
. As per the recent report published in Times Now, there is a 60% increase
on
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in
of
 traffic from the
last
 5 years.
Secondly
, the
fuel
 fares have already gone beyond the threshold limit, even though people still use their private vehicle as it seems to be the easy mode of commute.
Finally
, the quality and maintenance of public
transport
is
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are
 so devastating that it is making the life of
traveler’s
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 miserable, which in turn is forcing the passengers to opt their private
transport
.
However
, to solve the climate change issues, there are various other methods which could be taken into consideration. The government should come up with subsidies for the
usage
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use
 of public
transport
, which would attract more passengers because of which the traffic deteriorates.
Besides
, the officials should pass strict rules that a family should not own more than one car so that the number of vehicle purchase goes down, which contributes to the nature.
Nevertheless
, the forests which are being uprooted to construct the industries and factories should be controlled, which reduces the deforestation issues as well as the poisonous gases getting released from them could be brought down.
Subsequently
, it could bring a substantial change in the Earth’s nature. In conclusion, I disagree
to
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with
 the assertion that there are various other
factor
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factors
 to fight the global environment issues and hiking the
fuel
 prices would not suffice
this
 serious problem.
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