Computer games are very popular in all ages and nationalities. Parents think is has little educational value and it will be harmful for children. What is your opinion and give example based on your own experience.

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Computer games have seen a radical rise in popularity among children. Some parents believe,

such

games have adverse effects on the mental growth of a their children, and provide no educational value. I concur with

this

argument and in

this

essay I will put forth of views with suitable examples.

Firstly

, Children nowadays spend hours playing

video

games, and

this

sometimes affects the mental health of a child.

For example

, a research conducted by the United Nations found that, playing

video

games for long stretches of time will lead to depression and mental instability among children.

Moreover

video

games can be very addictive and it is important for parents to keep an eye on their children's gaming habits.

This

addiction will affect a child's study time and ultimately it will bad grades at school.

Secondly

, some of the

video

games these days are very violent and children can easily be influenced by

such

games.

For example

, even some of the PG rated games today like "Deadline" has very graphic violence as part of their storyline.

For instance

, in a recent study conducted by the Institute for Children's welfare, it was found that, in sixty percentage of the mass shooting happening across schools is the US, the shooter is influenced by violent

video

games.

This

statistic is very alarming, and parents should curate the games played by their children. To conclude, I am not against children playing

video

games, since it provides an avenue for the children to relax, but parents should always be very careful of the games that their children are playing, since it can have a negative impact on their mental growth.

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Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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