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Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Recently the mode of communication has been transformed and people tend to send an email and text messages
instead
 of meeting their friends in person. Many argue that
this
 has not resulted in favourable impact to their social lives. To most extent I agree with the fact that the recent technology has ruined what used to be the real fun involving and meeting your friends physically. We can't deny the fact that the growing
use
 of emails and messages has resulted in very quick and efficient mode of communication.
Furthermore
, it is very convenient and user friendly which accessible to every age group and varied group of person.
For example
, people usually send an email or text message to their friends in different country,
instead
 of sending a letter by post which takes a lot of time compared to the new mode of communicating.
However
,
this
 quickness and convenience has resulted into laziness amongst the youths and teenagers to meet one another in person.
Furthermore
, there is no physical activity which improves their health. In the early days when there were no
such
 technology people used to go out and have fun activities with their friends, which is fading away recently with more and more
use
 of internet and new way communication which does not involve any physical activity. I would share an example including me, previously me and my friends
use
 to go out and have a coffee while talking to each other, but now that has been replaced with just chatting over messages, which I feel at times is not enough to be socially active. To conclude, I would say that the
use
 of emails and messages has several benefits mainly which that they are quick and convenient;
however
, they are having a significant adverse impact on the society and preventing to indulge themselves in physical activities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern forms of communication
  • email
  • messaging
  • reduce
  • amount of time
  • see friends
  • social lives
  • technology
  • communication
  • faster
  • convenient
  • stay in touch
  • connect
  • online
  • social media platforms
  • meet new people
  • face-to-face interactions
  • maintain relationships
  • excessive reliance
  • social isolation
  • digital communication
  • emotional depth
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