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Write a letter to a friend who is looking for a part time job. Describe a job you have found for him/her including: - What are the duties? - Why do you think it is a good job for him/her? - What does he/she have to do to get it?

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Dear Jane,
Finally
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! After a long search, I have been able to find you a part-time Job. I remember you told me that you have customer care relations skills. So, I got a remote work for you on Amazon and I think you are going to love it. As to the specifics of the job, you are required to work not more than 20 hours per week.
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, you would need to choose your shifts wisely.
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, since you would be working from home, you would be required to attend to customer's complaints on phone calls and emails only, and
at the end
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 of each day, you are to submit the details of your activities to the company's manager for evaluation. Actually, I think you will do well in the company because it's what you love.
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, I am very aware of the short courses on customer relations that you took online over the past few years.
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, your years of experience at your two previous jobs are invaluable, which makes you qualified for the role.
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, you could go to the closest Amazon outlet to pick a form and register your interest,
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, submitting an online application is preferable. You would be asked to provide relevant documents and
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 followed by an interview. I look forward to seeing you resume your new role. Warm regards, Moses.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph contains a single clear idea to improve readability. For example, separate the duties and how your friend should apply into distinct paragraphs.
task achievement
Incorporate a brief introduction where you mention the general purpose of the letter before diving into the specifics of the job offer.
task achievement
The letter is detailed and covers all aspects of the task prompt comprehensively.
task achievement
The letter maintains a friendly and encouraging tone suitable for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure is solid, with a natural flow from one point to the next.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are well-executed, adding a personal touch to the letter.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • part-time job
  • duties
  • responsibilities
  • skills
  • interests
  • suitability
  • local café
  • retail
  • library
  • customers
  • organizing
  • stock management
  • application process
  • resume
  • cover letter
  • online application
  • relevant experience
  • interview preparation
  • attire
  • encouragement
  • support
  • tailoring application
  • people skills
  • passion
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