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Stress-related illnesses are becoming increasing common. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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People are increasingly suffering from sicknesses
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 of
stress
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This
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 essay will discuss the two main causes of
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 related sicknesses including longer working hours and increased job targets and
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 proposes solutions to these problems
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 as improving one's
work
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 life balance and
diet
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. People are working longer hours than ever before.
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, they have more job pressures. People place themselves under these unfavourable conditions because the workforce is a competitive domain.
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, some people aspire to climb the corporate ladder to gain high status and a high paying job.
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 often results in mental and physical suffering because they have to
work
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 overtime and take an additional role which be stressful. Maintaining a good
work
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 life balance and improving one's
diet
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 is both critical to mitigating
stress
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 related illnesses. People need to realise that if they only for
work
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 they will suffer either mentally or physically and a poor
diet
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 will
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 exacerbate these issues.
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, many employees, burnout from working too much and neglecting family, friends, exercise and hobbies as well as the foods they eat.
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, in order to reduce
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 one include a better ratio of
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, rest, recreation and dietary sustenance. In conclusion, in today's fast-paced world more and more people are becoming ill
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 of
stress
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This
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 essay discussed how
stress
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 is often caused by long working hours and intense workplace pressure.
This
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 essay
also
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 suggested that the solutions to
this
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 problem are two fold: to manage a better
work
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 life balance and to eat healthier
diet
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stress-related illnesses
  • hypertension
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • modern lifestyle
  • work pressure
  • technological advancements
  • social pressures
  • material wealth
  • work-life balance
  • mindfulness
  • meditation
  • stress management
  • flexible working hours
  • telecommuting
  • mandatory vacation
  • educational programs
  • mental health
  • supportive work environment
  • counseling services
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