As children become adults, their social behaviour changes in some ways. What are the main differences between young children’s social behaviour and that of adults? To what extent are the changes that take place good?

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ehavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

and their attitude are not only changes with s

ituation,

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the situation

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with their age. It is often seen that, when kids grow to an adult, their way of behaving in the

society

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changes due to age,

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; I am somewhat agree to the above statement and I have tried to explain

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in details in the paragraphs below.

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with, every human changes in milestone as they grow bigger. Especially their

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ehavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

shows a commendable change toward the

society

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in adulthood.

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is very common in young kids, because they want to assimilate with elder’s

society

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and they are keen to join their culture.

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, according to most of the kids, they don’t like to be as a child,

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, they socially act like g

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a grown man

grown men

with their etiquettes and show more chivalrous to o

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the opposite gender

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with their adults.

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, it is plausibly seen in teen group of kids, as they are in

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a tender age where they want to be like a

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adults

an adult

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the family

and social function they try to mix up with a group of adults around them.

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, there is always a huge noticeable difference present in kid’s

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ehavior.

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

Mainly their way of clothing and attitude changes, so if they are wearing tees and jeans,

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they mostly prefer to wear formal clothing and business type’s wears.

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, they a

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are not only speaking

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gossips, but

become more vigilant toward political and share market’s kind of issues. To exemplify, it is always seen during the high school competition time, t

een kids

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teen, kids

have a plethora of knowledge, due to their interest in reading a n

ews-papers

a daily or weekly publication on folded sheets; contains news and articles and advertisements

newspaper

and keep themselves an update with recent trends like their parents, so somewhere they show the essence of their changed

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ehavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

like an a

dults.

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adult

To conclude, it is not always t

rue where

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true, where

kid’s

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ehavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

is like an adult in the

society

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, some like to be a nonchalant and enjoy as they are. Similar w

ay even

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way, even

adults a

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are also behaving

also behave

have also behaved

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behave as a kid in most of the social places, so according to my opinion, I am somewhat agree to the above statement.

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As children become adults, their social behaviour changes in some ways. What are the main differences between young children’s social behaviour and that of adults? To what extent are the changes that take place good?

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some people think that money makes a live comfortable while other believe that having a large amount of money brings more trouble do you think advantages of this outweigh disadvantages ?

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Other say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

4/The demand for online coaching services and video courses has grown significantly in the digital age. Some now feel this method of learning is a superior option to in-person learning. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

You have had your computer repaired by your local computer supplier. You were extremely impressed with the service. Write a letter to the manager of the shop. Describe what happened when you call the shop. Praised the staff who helped you and ask the manager to thank those concerned.