The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries in 1999 and 2004.
The tables illustrate the data about the trading of
coffee
and bananas
at Fairtrade-labelled in five European countries during 1999 and 2004 in millions of euros
.
Overall
, initially
the highest Add a comma
,initially
sales
of coffee
are made in Switzerland
, but eventually UK
had more Correct article usage
the UK
sales
. However
, the
Correct article usage
apply
bananas
vending was high in Switzerland
for the given years.
The
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Coffee
coffee
sales
in the UK was
1.5 Correct subject-verb agreement
were
million
euros
in 1999, but by 2004 this
has reached to
20 Change preposition
apply
million
euros
. However
, in Switzerland
and Denmark, the sales
accounts 3
and 1.8 Change preposition
for 3
million
of
Change preposition
apply
euros
in 1999, while
in 2004 this
was 6 and 2 million
of
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apply
euros
. Moreover
, Belgium and Sweden sold 1 and 0.8 million
euros
of coffee
and at
the Change preposition
in
end
the Add a comma
,end
sales
were 1.7 and 1 million
euros
.
On the other hand
, bananas
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banana
sales
in Switzerland
in 1999 and 2004 were 15 and 47 million
euros
, while
in the UK this
was 1 and increased gradually to 5.5 million
of
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apply
euros
. Whereas
, in 1999, Belgium and Sweden had
traded 0.6 and 1.8 Unnecessary verb
apply
million
euros
, and eventually this
has
reached 4 and just 1 Unnecessary verb
apply
million
euros
. Finally
, in the
Denmark, 2 Correct article usage
apply
million
euros
of bananas
are sold initially
, but in 2004 this
decreased to 0.9 million
euros
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, initially, while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, bananas, euros, sales, switzerland, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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