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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same thing and avoiding change. Others, however think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #lives #change
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Some people like to do the same thing over and over again and keep away from doing something new. Whereas, others believe in
change
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 being the best. In my opinion, the only thing constant is
change
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 and people should adapt to it. There are many people who don’t like to
change
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 the
way
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 they are working or doing something. They have their own routine at the same time, they get the same enjoyment doing it over and over again. To give you an example, a person who runs an inheritance business, tries to run the same
way
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 as their ancestor was doing it. Even after availability of new
technology
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, they are running the business same
way
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 because people like their product and
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 owners feel pride and enjoy being doing the same
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. But in
the current w
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the current world
orld, there are very few examples of
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 people.
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, due to the advancement of
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 people have access to many information and they want to explore new things or
try a differe
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a different way
different ways
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 of doing the same things. In
this
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 competitive world to sustain one’s business an individual has to come up with new ideas and try to differentiate themselves in order to gain market share. As a classic example, Nokia was pioneered in mobile phon
es in the
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the late 1990s
late 1990s, but they fail to manage with the advancement of
technology
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 in early 2000s and stick to their traditional
technology
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.
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, within two years they came to bankruptcy from being once market leader. In conclusion, there are numerous people or organization who can’t adapt to changing environment and they like to do things as they are doing, but I feel that, in
this
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 technological era, one should adapt to
change
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 and try new things or at least do the same things differently to gain new experience.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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