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Thanks to developments in technology, many people today have lost basic skills such as how to repair clothes, etc. Why is this happening? Do you think that this is a negative development?

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Many people have lost the basic skills like repairing clothes, even though there are tremendous changes in technology development.In my opinion people have become too lazy to do their tasks themselves.More than lazy
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I think they want to take advantage of the latest developments in technology like washing machines, mixer-grinders etc., In one way
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using the latest inventions for busy life is good
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but it shouldn't make us lazy and forget the basic skills which we learnt from our parents
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grand parents. They used to be healthy and lived for a long time because they were so active doing things by themselves without depending on any ready-made solutions. I don't think it's a negative development
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but people should realize and have more awareness and how to use things. Social media is playing a vital role in our lives now-a-days. Its completely acceptable to use social media for good things but we should be careful of the negative effects it is having on our lives

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