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You have organised to go on holiday with your friend. However, you must change your plans. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, - Tell them how much you are looking forward to the holiday - Explain why you must change your plans - Suggest alternative arrangements

#holiday #friend #change #plans #alternative #arrangements
Hi Chintan, I hope you are doing well! Our departure date is just a week around for our most awaited
trip
 and I hope you are having the same excitement level as when we had organised
this
trip
 a month back. I want to inform you that my father had
heart
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 stroke
this
 Monday and doctors have suggested
him
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he
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to
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apply
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take
rest
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a rest
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 for the week. His health is better and there is
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nothing
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noting
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nothing
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 to worry about but, I’ve to make some changes to our planned
trip
.
Instead
 of our planned five days
trip
, I’ve to short it to four days and I’ll join you directly at the destination
from
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on
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second
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the second
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 day. I know we had planned different activities for each day and you were equally excited but for one day you’ve to spend it on your own and explore the place. I hope we enjoy our upcoming
trip
 as planned and
really
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 sorry for the
inconvience
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inconvenience
. See you soon Ankit
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