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Nowadays people moving to other countries for work. Some people say that it is difficult for children lives, others think that it is better for them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In recent days, the populace has shifted to other nations for their jobs. Some people opine that it is hard for children to live there, while others believe that it is fine for them to move. Whilst a discussion of both these views is worthwhile, I am a supporter of the latter view. On the one hand, according to some relocating to developed countries might be harder for the young ones to survive in that climate.
That is
 to say, they are sensitive to climate changes which might cause some danger to their healths.
Also
, they have to leave all their peers and relatives and that make uncomfortable for them to live in a new place. A prime example is, in India, people are relocating to other developed countries for their work which creates health related problems in their children
such
 as skin allergies, cold and cough and so on.
However
, I do not support
this
 notion because
this
 is a temporary illness which can be cured in a couple of months and
this
 should not degrade the juveniles future to stay in abroad.
On the other hand
, transferring to different place will help them to enhance their career path in the future.
In other words
, youngsters will get a better education which will aid them to improve their knowledge and cognitive skills.
In addition
, they will get good job opportunities when they have excellent academic grades. In Canada,
for instance
, most of the populace are from different countries and they are placed in top companies because of their training is in the same place. In my opinion, I agree that moving to other countries will improvise their learning and betterment of their future career. In conclusion,
although
 planning to move to another location will make the younger ones to get sick often, I believe despite of the harder ways for children, the fruitful for them in literacy and their career path outweighs the other temporary issue.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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