Some people think that schools have to be more entertaining, while others think that their sole purpose is to educate. Which do you agree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

While it can be argued that fun should be part of sc

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the schools

ore, another opinion is that schools should serve the only purpose of imparting education. I agree with the latter view because pupils are already having one day a week as for

entertainment

in most of the schools and they have plenty of

time

after

school

to enjoy entertaining activities. Perhaps the main reason why I am not in fa

vor o

promote over another

favour

f the idea of students having more

time

for

entertainment

at schools is that most of the institutes are already providing a designated slot of

entertainment

- be it sports, arts, or theatre. A good illustration of

this

is the

school

from where I had studied - The Cathedral High

school

, where we were supposed to have bi-weekly games, arts, and th

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a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented

theatre

eriods;

as a result

, we never felt a need for extra

entertainment

Further

, unlike in the past, schools today te

nd t

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tends

o organize excursions more often which is good

entertainment

However

, the more students focus on studies in educational sectors, the more competent workforce will be produced and, in turn, the country will be prosperous. Despite these arguments, there are

also

some other reasons to agree with the idea of schools to stick to their only purpose (education) is that students have ample

time

to entertain themselves after

school

by being engaged in different activities

such

as hanging out with family or friends.

In addition

, they can play outdoor sports like soccer or cricket or roam around with their pets to entertain themselves;

hence

, there is no need for more

time

for

entertainment

in the

school

Besides

, in the contemporary world, pedagogical experts are adopting the methodologies to teach students in

such

an efficient way that the home works are being omitted from the

school

system;

therefore

, students after getting off fr

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school

can have enough

time

for the

entertainment

. In conclusion,

although

numerous people are in fa

vor o

promote over another

favour

f the schools to extend the

entertainment

span for the children, I believe students should only focus on studies at

school

and they can enjoy different activities after

school

time

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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