Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

There is no doubt that, since several centuries, the music was the only thing which made the people united. The question is do songs really have
this
power of bringing people from different countries and ages together? In
this
essay, I am going to give my personal opinion and draw my own conclusion. In terms of advantages, music can effects lot of nations in a positive way and lets anyone listen to it without knowing of his or her age or nationality. The main reason given to support
this
claim is the numbers of song’s views on YouTube, you can see how millions listened to these songs which clearly shows how popular are they. To illustrate, people when they listen to any kind of songs they forget all the borders between them and the others.
In other words
, singing is the language of the whole world.
Hence
the belief that songs make the human beings feel like they are one nation. In the other hand, some songs could use as a tool to attack the people's feelings.
For example
, in the
last
century there were some songs made to be against the black people. Those types of singing called (diss track) which included bad words and negative thoughts. These kind of songs made a war between white and black people in the USA in the 1950s.
However
, that never happened again and all the singing is now singing about the peace and how can we live with other people without thinking of their skin or their nationality. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both views, I believe that music has a very positive influence on different kind of people.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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