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Some people believe in order for a hobby to be enjoyable, it needs to be difficult in some ways. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #hobby
Hobbies are the best way to diverge our mind. There is no direct relationship between the difficulty level of a
hobby
 and the enjoyment from it,
however
, some people believe, it has a direct relationship. In my opinion, both can be fun.
To begin
 with, no one chooses a
hobby
 by looking after its level of difficulty. It is only about the interest of people, which makes them happy, to illustrate, many people enjoy playing snakes and ladder,
although
, it is an easy game for most of the adults but many of them enjoy it because they find it interesting.
Similarly
, the basic card game is easy to play,
however
, when it's played with multiple friends
then
 becomes pleasurable.
On the contrary
, difficult hobbies can sometimes be exciting. If a
hobby
 is challenging, we might feel a sense of satisfaction when we manage to do it.
For example
, film editing is a
hobby
 which requires a level of knowledge and expertise. Many people take few years to become experts and find it boring during that tenure,
however
, once they start it, it becomes pleasurable. In conclusion, simple hobbies can be fun and relaxing, but difficult hobbies can be equally pleasurable for different reasons.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of accomplishment
  • overcoming obstacles
  • gratifying
  • continuous source of enjoyment
  • relaxing activities
  • unwind and de-stress
  • counterproductive
  • mental break
  • subjective
  • personal preference
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