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some sporting events are fomouse .It is positive or negative effect. give your opinion

#events #fomouse #effect
Sporting events are very important activities of
people
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person's
 life. But some events are more popular other than those sports
event
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events
 has involve
high amount
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a high amount
 of money. It is a positive trend if all events are equally important than people will not have much interest in these events
To begin
 with sporting events
are
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is
 good of
country's development
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the country's development
 and player get good opportunity to show their talent in front of people.
Moreover
, some international events build
good understanding
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a better understanding
better understanding
 among countries and their relation, if players meet with players of other
country
 they can share their experience. Events provide chance
to
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for
new generation
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a new generation
new generations
 to build confidence, they play outside of
country
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the country
, they get to know about other players technique.
Furthermore
, sporting events like Olympic, world cup they all are
most important events
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the most important events
 and organise after some
years but
Accept comma addition
years, but
 they are most popular in every
country
 if the world because of their values.
In addition
, some sports are popular because of they are dangerous, players play these game
name
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names
 and fame. In conclusion, sporting events very important of
country
 development or player boost their confidence as well as name and fame.
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